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雅思写作十个“见官死”例句

2013-04-18 09:48

 

    雅思写作中总是存在“见官死”的案例,这些又重点集中在文章的开头部分。许多考生总以为自己的写作没有问题了,殊不知在考官眼中,这些句子都是要扣分的。济南新航道就整理了十大“见官死”的开头供学生参考。
“见官死”开头之一:中式英文 人见人晕(喷血指数:☆☆☆☆☆)
典型失败案例:Topic 1-The happiest moment in your life 
  In our life, there are always some moments which make your heart flower opened angrily……
Topic 2- The population problem
  The population problem is a very big problem. For example, in the city centers of Shanghai, we can always see people mountain people sea there.
Topic3- Is there fairness in today’s business world?
  I think in today’s society, there is no fairness in the business world. For example, I always chopped when I go out buy things……
Topic 4- The advantage of being a nice person
  Being a nice person have many advantage. I believe if a people always do bad things, he will get “baoying”. 
“见官死”开头之二: 观点武断 态度强硬 (喷血指数:☆☆☆)
典型失败案例:Topic1-The importance of confidence 
   In my opinion, confidence is the most important thing for a person. All the successful people in the world are full of confidence. While those people who don’t have confidence, they all have failed.
Topic 2 - The solution to the traffic problem
  I think to solve the traffic problem, very easy! For those who don’t obey the traffic rules, we should put all of them into prison. If we do that, I’m sure there will be no traffic problem any more.
“见官死”开头之三:中国俗语 胡乱翻译(喷血指数:☆☆☆☆☆)
典型失败案例:Topic 1-Is it good to have a large family? 
  I think it is good to have a large family. Because we Chinese believe a sentence: “Many sons, many lucks”……
正确说法:Happiness lies in having many children
Topic 2 -Should we pretend to know everything or admit our ignorance?
  We all know, our Chinese old fathers and grandfathers said: “Know is know, don’t know is don’t know”……
Topic 3- Do you think one’s character is greatly influenced by his/her family?
  Chinese old words says very good: Dragon born dragon, phoenix born phoenix, rat’s son can make hole……
Topic 4- The advantage of being a nice person
  I believe one sentence:“A good person is all life safe”. We Chinese people always say: “Good has good pay, bad has bad pay”.
“见官死”开头之四:语法错误 惨不忍睹(喷血指数:☆☆☆)
典型失败案例:Topic-If children behave badly, should their parents accept responsibility and also be punished? (雅思真题)
  About this problem, my think is if children behave badly, then parents are not right. Because teach child is parent’s responsibility. So we also punish parents too besides children is also should.
“见官死”开头之五:意思重复 原地踏步(喷血指数:☆☆☆)
典型失败案例:Topic-Your opinion on DINK families 
  My opinion on DINK families is that DINK families is not a good thing. And it is a bad thing. It brings no benefits to our society and it is even sometimes harmful to our society.
“见官死”开头之六:观点模糊 态度暧昧(喷血指数:☆☆☆)
典型失败案例: Topic-Should college students be allowed to get married? 
  I think this topic is very hard to say. Because I am still very little, only 17, and not married, so this topic is very difficult for me……
“见官死”开头之七:过分简单 没有重点(喷血指数:☆☆)
典型失败案例:Topic-The importance of environmental protection
  This issue is surely very important, let’s talk about it!
“见官死”开头之八:废话连篇不知所云(喷血指数:☆☆☆)
典型失败案例: Topic 1-Should college students be allowed to get married? 
  This topic is very interesting. I’m very interested in talking about this topic. Because I’m also a college student and I’m not married……
修改方案:开门见山 直奔主题
In my opinion, it would not be a wise decision to allow college students to get married.
Topic 2-Will modern technology, such as the Internet, ever replace the book or the writing word as the sole source of information? (雅思真题)
  Ok, this topic is a very good topic. First, let me tell you a story: I have a friend, he likes go on the internet very much. Every day, he uses internet to read news or play internet games. So we can see the internet is more and more important in our daily life.
Topic 3-The importance of environmental protection
  Oh, this topic is surely very important. Isn’t it? Of course! It’s really very very important!
“见官死”开头之九:偏离主题 无轨电车(喷血指数:☆☆☆☆)
典型失败案例:Topic-It is said that nowadays one can not acquire the qualifications and quality essential to success through university education. To what extent do you agree or disagree with the statement? (雅思真题)
  I think to success, we must have a lot of important qualities. To have these important qualities, we must learn a lot of things, for example, English, music tools, and etc. We can learn these qualities from our teachers, our friends and from books. All in all, we can learn from many places.
“见官死”开头之十:用词不当 表达不准 (喷血指数:☆☆)
典型失败案例:Topic-Should college students be allowed to get married?
  I think college students should not be allowed to get married because they are very young and so we can’t take the responsibility to form a family.

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