【雅思作文真题直击】学生无法集中精力学习的原因及解决办法

 

 

　　雅思作文题目

　　Many students cannot concentrate their mind on the school work. Why? How to solve the problem?

 

　　解析

　　这是一篇典型的report类作文题目，要求描写现象，分析原因，然后提出解决方案。本题要求分析为什么现在很多孩子们都无法集中精力学习的原因及解决办法。这个话题大家都很熟悉，原因很容易找到，比如，现在孩子们的魂儿被电脑或智能手机勾走了;现在社会竞争压力大，父母和孩子在一起的时间少了，因此无法监督孩子学习;现在成功的道理很多条，读书不是出路了，等等。提出两个主要原因即可，然后针对这两个原因提出自己的解决方案即可。

 

　　7分范文

　　Students ought to spend most of their time on the school work, but nowadays it is not uncommon that students are simply not able to put their heart to study.

　　There could be two reasons why this happens. First, today the students are surrounded by far more distractions than the students 20 years ago. While students two decades ago had nearly no choice but get themselves shut in their study room and read books, students today have easy and fast access to Internet, on which they can do almost all things. For instance, they can play computer games, watch videos, search for the information they need, and chat with their friends, to mention only a few. So, instead of concentrating on their academic study, they spend a great amount of time surfing the Internet. Another important factor that affects the students' attitude towards their school work is that a good education they receive seems not as important as before. For quite a while, receiving a good education was the only way for young people to get a decent job or earn a high salary. But now, this does not seem so any more. Students find they have many other means to achieve success other than going to college. The students, therefore, are not motivated enough to focus on their school work.

　　As education of the young is so important to the future of the world, we ought to find ways out of this embarrassing situation. For example, the school and parents should work together to set limits to the time children spend online. Internet is a good great invention, yet obsession with it will certainly reduce the time that should have been put to more serious work. Besides, we should make our young people understand that life is not just about making money, but about having rich and colorful experience. Books, and education in general for that matter, are essential for them to live a better life.(327 words)

 

　　老师笔记

　　Students ought to spend most of their time on the school work, but nowadays it is not uncommon that students are simply not able to put their heart to study.

　　开头段，直接提出问题。

　　It is not uncommon that… 是一个很地道的英文表达，相当于it is common that…

　　Put their heart to study是用来替换concentrate on the school work的。英文写作中，比较忌讳重复，平时要注意积累同样意义的不同表达法，这是写作水平高低的一个标志。

　　There could be two reasons why this happens. First, today the students are surrounded by far more distractions than the students 20 years ago. While students two decades ago had nearly no choice but get themselves shut in their study room and read books, students today have easy and fast access to Internet, on which they can do almost all things. For instance, they can play computer games, watch videos, search for the information they need, and chat with their friends, to mention only a few. So, instead of concentrating on their academic study, they spend a great amount of time surfing the Internet. Another important factor that affects the students' attitude towards their school work is that a good education they receive seems not as important as before. For quite a while, receiving a good education was the only way for young people to get a decent job or earn a high salary. But now, this does not seem so any more. Students find they have many other means to achieve success other than going to college. The students, therefore, are not motivated enough to focus on their school work.

　　本段论述为什么孩子们无法集中精力学习的两个理由。首先是孩子们面对的干扰(distractions)更多了，尤其是网络的干扰;第二个理由是现在是否接受教育对孩子们未来的意义不如以前那么大了。

　　While这个词非常神奇，可以用于很多场合。此处用来表达轻微的转折，相当于中文里的“而”。

　　to mention only a few 一个超地道超有用的表达法!用于列举后，表示“诸如此类，等等”的意思。很多同学喜欢用那个无聊的…and so on，不妨换换!

　　academic study 看起来很高大上，其实就是school work的意思。

　　a decent job 一份体面的工作，看上去是不是比a good job要好些?

　　The students…are not motivated enough to…学生们没有足够的动力做……

　　As education of the young is so important to the future of the world, we ought to find ways out of this embarrassing situation. For example, the school and parents should work together to set limits to the time children spend online. Internet is a good great invention, yet obsession with it will certainly reduce the time that should have been put to more serious work. Besides, we should make our young people understand that life is not just about making money, but about having rich and colorful experience. Books, and education in general for that matter, are essential for them to live a better life.

　　本段针对上一段的两个原因，分别提出解决方案。有些同学经常在前面分析了原因，但后面的解决方法跟前面分析的原因不搭界，这样论文就失去逻辑连贯性了!

　　分析一下这句Internet is a good great invention, yet obsession with it will certainly reduce the time that should have been put to more serious work. (因特网是个绝好的发明，但如果沉迷于它，必然会减少用于更严肃工作的时间)在这句中，唐老师使用了一个非常英语化的表达，用动词obsess转变而来的名词obsession做主语来引领全句，而不是用if这样的泛滥的表达。不那么精彩的写作是这个模样的，比较一下：Internet is a good great invention, yet if students are obsessed with it, the time that should have been put to more serious work will certainly be reduced. 这句与前面唐老师写的那句相比，有洪荒之距!

　　for that matter 就此而言(建议认识就行，一般学生的确用不了这个词组!)

　　essential 就相当于“重要的，关键的”，可适当用来替换important.

 

　　参考译文

　　学生应该将大部分时间用在学习上，但现在很常见的是，学生根本无法专注于学习。

　　这种现象发生可能有两个原因。首先，和20年前相比，今天的学生周围的干扰要多得多。20年前，学生们几乎没有其他选择，只能将自己关在书房读书，而现在他们可以又快又容易地联入因特网，在因特网上他们什么都可以做。比如，他们可以玩电脑游戏，看影片，查询需要的信息，与朋友聊天，诸如此类。因此，他们不是集中精力在学习上，而是花很多时间在因特网上冲浪。另一个影响学生们学习态度的重要因素是，接受好的教育好像没有以前那么重要。曾有很长一段时间，接受好教育是年轻人获得体面工作或者挣到高工资的途径。但是现在，情况已经不是这样了。学生们发现，除了上大学，他们还有很多成功的方式。因此，学生们没有足够的动力来专注学习。

　　年轻人的教育对世界的未来如此重要，我们必须找到方法来解决这个令人尴尬的情形。比如，学校和父母应该携起手来，为孩子们的上网时间设限。因特网的确是个绝好的发明，但是若沉迷于它，则无疑会减少本应用于更严肃工作的时间。此外，我们还应让年轻人理解，生活不只是挣钱，而是拥有丰富多彩的经历。为了过上更好的生活，就此而言,书籍，乃至整个教育，是至关重要的。

 

 

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