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11月26日雅思写作大作文解析

作者: 2016-11-30 14:57 来源:济南编辑

 

 

  People believe that using mobile phones and computers to communicate. Therefore, people are losing the ability to communicate with each other face to face. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

 

  11月26日的雅思写作大作文涉及手机和电脑:我们用手机和电脑来交流,这个已经非常普遍了,但问题是,这种交流方式是否已经使我们失去面对面的交流能力呢?很明显,本题的核心是“交流能力”,用手机和电脑来交流会不会让我们忘记如何面对面交流?

  这个题并非出现在雅思考试中,它是2014年10月11日的原题重现。2013年、2014年的写作原题最近频繁再现江湖,烤鸭们似乎应该重视一下,平时练习可多写2014、2013年的真题。比如11月19日的作文“独居的好处和坏处”是2014年9月27日的原题;11月5日的作文“现在人是越来越独立还是越来越相互依靠”是2013年8月24日的原题,等等。

  手机类的话题当然不只涉及面对面交流,还包括其他议题。比如:在某些地方使用手机与抽烟一样不受人欢迎,那么是否应该像禁止抽烟一样禁止使用手机(2015年2月14日);有些人认为,用手机和电脑交流对人的写作和阅读能力有消极影响(2015年3月28日);手机和电脑让写信的人少了,你认为写信很重要吗(2012年11月24日);手机和互联网在人们交流中扮演的角色越来越重要,这是好还是坏(2012年8月9日),等等。

  那么,使用手机和电脑交流在多大程度上让我们失去了面对面的交流能力呢?其实,我们都很熟悉这个话题,比如手机和电脑交流的确提高了我们交流的速度和效率,但问题是交流的速度和效率并不是我们交流时关心的所有内容,有时候我们需要慢慢聊天,互相了解对方,比如面试或者交流感情,在这些时候,我们在手机上或电脑上交流时习惯的那些方式不仅不能起到好的效果,反而会阻碍交流效果。与此同时,习惯了远程交流的我们,往往不太注意身边朋友的感受。

  于是,我们可以从以下三个方面讨论手机或电脑交流对面对面交流的消极影响:

  (1)花太多时间,失去与真实人的交流时间

  (2)手机和电脑交流时不用注意对方的手势和表情,导致我们对声调、表情等非语言因素阅读能力的下降;

  (3)手机和电脑交流时我们只关注远方的人,忘记与附近的人进行情感交流,导致交流失败。

 

  7分范文

  We live in a world where communication through modern technology such as smart phone and computer is so prevalent that it’s hard to go anywhere without seeing someone texting, emailing, writing blogs and tweeting. Of course the use of technology can be good. It provides us with faster, more efficient ways to communicate with others, but it can also harm our ability to communicate with people face to face.

  Studies have shown that students who rely so heavily on technology have trouble communicating in person because they don’t quite develop all of the necessary skills to hold or even start a face-to-face conversation. For example, students who are constantly texting with abbreviated forms of words such as “LOL” and “OMG” have begun to speak with the same acronyms. This form of talking is often seen as flighty and uneducated. Furthermore, in the face to face communication, especially the serious ones, such as interviewing someone, or just meeting someone for the first time, we need to catch the subtle tone in their voice, see their expression as it changes from sad to outraged, and look them in the eye to see if they are trustworthy. Yet most of these skills have been lost to our obsession with the smart phone and computer.

  In addition, many of us have formed the habit of using the smart phone even when we are with our friends. The unspoken subtext of checking text messages in front of friends is: “Somewhere else there is someone who I care about more than you. I want to know what they have to say more than what you have to say to me now.” In this way, we are devaluing our current situation, the friends and family around us, our surroundings and setting, for something going on elsewhere. This is certainly a complete disrespect for the people we spend time with in person, which may ruin our relationship with them.

  In summary, though I believe the smart phone and computer are very useful in speeding up our communication with others, they may prevent us from finding enough time to communicate with real people in person and even worse, they may result in ineffectiveness or even failure in our face-to-face interactions with others.

 

  参考译文

  我们生活的世界里,用诸如职能手机和电脑等现代科技来交流的现象非常普遍,走到任何地方,你都不难看到有人在发短信、邮件、博客或者推特。当然,使用高科技应该是好事,高科技为我们提供更快更有效率的方式来与别人交流,然而,高科技也可能伤害我们面对面交流的能力。

  研究表明,极度依赖科技手段的学生与人交流时有困难,因为这些学生没有培养足够的技能来维持或者开始面对面交谈。比如,有些学生发短信时总是使用类似 “LOL”和 “OMG”的缩略词,结果说话时也用同样的首字母词。这种交谈方式经常被视为不严肃,或者文化程度不高。而且,面对面交流,尤其是那些严肃的交流,比如面试或者次与某人会面,我们需要捕获别人声音中的细微音调,看他们的表情如何从悲哀变成愤怒,直视别人眼睛看他们是否值得信任。但是当我们沉迷于智能手机和电脑时,这些技能大都丢失了。

  此外,我们很多人都已经养成用智能手机的习惯,即使当我们和朋友在一起。在朋友面前查阅短信,其潜台词是:“在别处有某个人,我关心他甚过你。我想听他们说话甚过听你说话。”这样,我们就在为别处的某件事,轻慢当下的情景,轻慢身边的亲友,轻慢周围环境。这当然是表示完全不尊重与我们在一起的人,这种做法可能毁掉我们和他们的关系。

  总之,我相信智能手机和电脑非常有助于我们加快与他人的交流,但也会阻碍我们找到足够时间来与真人交流,更糟糕的是,手机和电脑还可能导致我们与别人的面对面交流无效,甚至失败。

 

  老师笔记

  01

  We live in a world where communication through modern technology such as smart phone and computer is so prevalent that it’s hard to go anywhere without seeing someone texting, emailing, writing blogs and tweeting. Of course the use of technology can be good. It provides us with faster, more efficient ways to communicate with others, but it can also harm our ability to communicate with people face to face.

  解析

  (1) 本段描写背景(用手机电脑交流十分普遍),然后提出自己的观点:用高科技来交里当然好,但也可能伤害我们面对面交流的能力。这里用的是雅思写作中常用的“先扬后抑”方式来提出全文的观点。接下来的任务就是为这个观点提供2-3个原因分析。

  (2) prevalent 普遍的;流行的

  (3) efficient 有效率的

  (4) 划线部分是列举“用手机电脑来交流”的具体方式,包括发短信(texting)、发邮件(emailing)、发博客(writing blogs)、发推特(tweeting)。列举是让文章显得更具体、更生动的方法之一。

  02

  Studies have shown that students who rely so heavily on technology have trouble communicating in person because they don’t quite develop all of the necessary skills to hold or even start a face-to-face conversation. For example, students who are constantly texting with abbreviated forms of words such as “LOL” and “OMG” have begun to speak with the same acronyms. This form of talking is often seen as flighty and uneducated. Furthermore, in the face to face communication, especially the serious ones, such as interviewing someone, or just meeting someone for the first time, we need to catch the subtle tone in their voice, see their expression as it changes from sad to outraged, and look them in the eye to see if they are trustworthy. Yet most of these skills have been lost to our obsession with the smart phone and computer.

  解析

  (1) 本段讨论我们在用手机电脑交流时可能养成的习惯或者失去的技能,包括两项:,用缩写形式;第二,不会抓住别人说话的语气。两个点之间用furthermore连接。本段唐老师提醒烤鸭们学习如何用具体生动的例证来强化自己的观点。

  (2) have trouble doing... 做......有问题

  (3) develop skills to do... 培养做......的技能(另外,养成......的态度,也是用develop)

  (4) abbreviated forms 缩写形式

  (5) acronyms 首字母缩写

  (6) flighty 轻浮的;不严肃的

  (7) subtle 细微的

  (8) look sb. in the eye 直视某人

  (9) obsession with... 对......的沉迷

  03

  In addition, many of us have formed the habit of using the smart phone even when we are with our friends. The unspoken subtext of checking text messages in front of friends is: “Somewhere else there is someone who I care about more than you. I want to know what they have to say more than what you have to say to me now.” In this way, we are devaluing our current situation, the friends and family around us, our surroundings and setting, for something going on elsewhere. This is certainly a complete disrespect for the people we spend time with in person, which may ruin our relationship with them.

  解析

  (1) 本段讨论用手机电脑交流的另外一个问题:当与家人朋友一起时,我们喜欢用手机,这样可能让面对面交流失败。

  (2) subtext 潜台词

  (3) devalue 不看重

  (4) disrespect 不尊重;失礼

  04

  In summary, though I believe the smart phone and computer are very useful in speeding up our communication with others, they may prevent us from finding enough time to communicate with real people in person and even worse, they may result in ineffectiveness or even failure in our face-to-faceinteractions with others.

  解析

  (1) 本段为结尾段,总结全文观点,用ineffectiveness和failure两个词概括前面两段的主要内容。

  (2) speed up 加快

  (3) result in 导致

  (4) interaction 交流 (communication的替换词)

 

  (文 唐伟胜 新航道特约雅思学术顾问)

 

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